Comments on: Friday Flash Fiction 44

By: Neil

Neil — Fri, 26 Sep 2008 20:25:30 +0000

As Justin says very tight prose and the sensory detail is spot on.

This is particularly good:

She can see his face reflected in the window, illuminated by the dials on the dashboard. She can see the sweat on his forehead; smell the cabin’s mixed scents of engine oil, fear, and hot plastic.

Thanks for sharing.

By: Gareth L Powell

Gareth L Powell — Fri, 26 Sep 2008 12:52:13 +0000

Thanks. It also makes a nice counterpoint to my ranting about “optimism” in the previous post.

By: Justin

Justin — Fri, 26 Sep 2008 11:01:59 +0000

One of the most tight and economical uses of language I’ve seen for quite some time. Good stuff!

By: ShaunCG

ShaunCG — Fri, 26 Sep 2008 10:01:27 +0000

A great piece of flash fiction as always, Gareth! I particularly like the “ribbon of yellow light” line.